Wednesday, 13 March 2019
writing w7t1
I was standing outside It was cold and the house looked broken gross abandoned I heard something being dragged in the house then I heard thunder then lightning in the distance I saw it the storm was getting worse then I heard a stick crack behind me I turned I saw a figure move than the thunder was different It was as sharp as a sword being drawn than more sticks being cracked a mans breathing right behind me I ran into the house I smelt like something was rotten in the house there was shattered glass everywhere I heard the rain start so I tip toed took look for a place to hide the floor started to crack it was old the floor was breaking then I heard heavy stomping crashing extreme footsteps
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Hello Lachlan,
ReplyDeleteIt's Tali here and i like how you use lot and interesting descriptive words. Maybe next time you could use some hyperbole. Looking forward to reading the rest of your writing.