write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect
I learnt to write a descriptive paragraph and paint a picture in peoples heads
I woke up fast the same nightmare seeing the flames, I can’t see it hurts my head to think of it, the night my life failed and everything went wrong, but my mind won’t let me forget. I sat there in silence, my body aching I can’t stand to be like this anymore. I just want the pain to end, but I’m trapped, trapped by the thoughts in my head and trapped in this cabin a prisoner in mind, body and spirit.
In this old wooden cabin where I’m stuck what am I going to do now I can’t stay here hiding I need to move on from this, I need a plan a plan to help me escape, if I can free myself from this prison I can do anything I put my mind too. I can’t bare to see their faces in my mind as the flames overtook them I thought it was a nightmare I can’t believe their gone my dear John and Lucy and it was all my fault. If I can just get out of here then I can make things right.
Hi lachlan, I really like the Paragraph Writing it is very descriptive and you shown us a great Paragraph writing that I like. Maybe next time you can add the WALT and the description so that you would tell them why you need to write a Paragraph writing but it is a very good writing Lachlan well done.
ReplyDeleteWell done Lachlan, I can see you have worked hard to ensure that each paragraph contains similar ideas. You need to ensure that you are using descriptive language to paint a picture in the readers head. Have you thought about words/phrases to make links across paragraphs?
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